T2Narrative

L.I. We are learning to edit and proof read our writing Before After
 * Tuesday 5th July 2011**

__Friday 17 June 2011__
 * Thursday 23rd June 2011**

L.I. We are learning to edit and proof read our writing

S.C. We have

changed the order of the sentence to sound more interesting, e.g. starting with a action verb Today i changed i sat down on the side path next to lila and i let out a deep sigh i also changed he was no longer a problem for the two that were nervous and frightened.
 * made it make sense and flow nicely when reading
 * used a thesaurus

**Tuesday 21st of June 2011**

“Lila get in here shouted Kobey” “No Kobey shouted Lila it is safer out side then in that rusty old dairy that is a bout to come down “Mum Mum yelled lila where were you what has happened” “Exscuse me i’m not your mum” Yes you are”

**Tuesday 14th June 2011**

**WALT-Use our senses to help describe in our writing** **S.C**
 * See-** My marshmallow is the colour of dry snow on a big beautiful steep mountain with fairy dust all over it and uneven bumps all over it.


 * Smell-** My marshmallow smells like a fluffy sweet vanilla icing with a drop of strawberries


 * Feels- My marshmallow feels like a soft ball of fluff with a teaspoon of soft oozing sand molding into you fingers. **

Tast- my marshmallow tast likes a vanilla lollie coming down from heaven with fairy wings.


 * __Wednesday 8th June__**


 * __WALT - identify similes and metaphors__**

S.C. - We can identify the similes which use 'as' We can identify the similes which use 'like' We can identify metaphors We can explain what the similes and metaphors mean/are telling us about what we are reading

//Metaphors// are a way to compare to by saying that one thing is another thing. For example, we say somebody is a //fool//. In the past in Europe, a fool was a person who entertained the king or queen by doing silly things. The fool was a kind of clown. He often did crazy or stupid things to make people laugh. So when we call somebody a fool we really mean that he or she is doing something silly or stupid. We don’t really mean that they are somebody who entertains the king or queen. We are using a metaphor.

What do we mean when we say these things: When we //say someone is a pig// we really mean that __they are eating heaps or are acting like a pig and not using there table maners √__ When we //call someone an angel// we really mean that __they are really good. √__ If we //say someone is a giant// we really mean that __they are really tall. √__ When //we call a man an ogre or a woman a witch// we really __mean that they re really mean like a witch.√__ When somebody plays cards and //we call them a shark//, __we really mean that they are good at playing √__ If we say that //somebody is a volcano ready to explode//, we really mean that __they are angry and are going to shout or something. √__ When we say somebody is //bright// we mean t__hat they are very good at school.__

Metaphors are imaginative ways to describe something by comparing that thing to something else. For example, if I wanted to say that Dan is tall, I could say that //Dan is a giant//. Use a metaphor to describe somebody who is man.-Mike is a mountain. kind-Ella is a fairy god mother. fast-Taylah is a cheater slow- Sam is a turtle √ smart-Bradin is a calculator √ fat-the dog is a ballon √ sneaky-my sister is a sake √ angry-Grace is a bull. √ beautiful-mum is a flower. √ ugly-He is a witch stubborn-she is camel √ short-Georgina is a mouse √ thin-Dan is a stick silly-milly is a clown √ scared easily she is a jumpy cat. √

Pattern 1: like Pattern 2: as Examples Examples Similes are a way to compare two things using ‘like’ or ‘as’. For example, if I want to say that somebody //swims well//, I can say they //swim like a fish// because fish swim well. There are two basic patterns that you can use. verb + like + noun She swims like a fish. He looks like an ogre. She plays like a pro. He walks like a duck. She acts like a fool. as + adjective + as + noun He is as tall as a giant. She is as fast as a rocket . He is as graceful as a swan. She is as sneaky as a fox . He is as quiet as a mouse. How could I say that somebody:

runs fast-he is as fast as a leaped √ pretty as a flower.√ jumps well-as a horse √ is strong as a bull √ How could I say that something:

is hard as a brick wall √ feels soft as soap. √ is sweet as a box of candy. √ feels rough as sand paper. √ is heavy as a house. √ sounds noisy as a state high way.√ is light as a feather. √

__**Thursday 9th June 2011.**__ W.A.L.T We are learning to identify and use alliteration in our writing. S.C *We can identify alliteration in text. *We can create examples of alliteration on different topics/consonants sounds.

Big beautiful butterfly went biserly buserly by Clever cat caught clean chocolate with charlotte and connor. Duffy duck drunk drove. Fishy fred feed the fish Felix finally. Georgie got good gold gracefully hannah had a habit of hanging around hay and horses. jumping james just jabed jamie into Josh