T1+Writing

__ WALT - write an argument using persuasive language features to convince people to visit the Bay of Plenty. __

** Success Criteria ** ** My writing contains an introduction, 3 key arguments and a conclusion ** ** I will state and restate my opinion ** ** I use a range of language resources and punctuation ** ** My paragraphs follow the S E E structure **

Tuesday 5th of April 2011

BOP Tourism

Are you tight with money?well then come to the bay of plenty were there are sunny beaches walking tracks,biking tracks ,fun water activities to do for you and your family. Were there are heaps of things to do for everyone all size and ages and every one should have a good time in the bay where everyone has a good time!! Here are my reasons why you should come to the sunny bay of plenty...

There are heaps of wonderful walking tracks and biking tracks in the bay of plenty and some are perfect for Your whole family because You can take all ages in most walking tracks.you can have a lovely walk with your pet animal in New Zealand bush while doing a fun orienteering corse with your family but do not miss out the biking were there is heaps of fun biking tracks for all sizes and ages with all abilities.

There are always heaps to do with water and your family boating ,biscuiting ,fishing and loads more, i will explain why it is so cool to come to the sunny bay of plenty and to have a good time boating going and checking out live hot thermal activities .Have a real good fun on on a biscuit checking out the lakes and having fun trying to get everyone off you can also have a nice quiet fishing experience with all of your family and friends having a blast trying to catch some dinner.

There for I think you should come to the sunny bay of plenty where you and all of your family will have heaps of fun on sunny beaches jumping in the waves and having fun doing the orienteering corses walking tracks,biking tracks with all abilities and ages have heaps of fun in and out of the water playing with of your family and out catching a feed, having fun on the biscuit going hard out !!!

** Georgia henstock **

** Great to see you using paragraphs Georgia, now try to link them e.g. firstly, my second reason, finally, another reason is. Excellent introduction that states your 3 main ideas, but then you don't have three paragraphs! You have forgotten to mention one of your ideas. Great restating your ideas in your conclusion but don't forget you can't bring in new ideas to your conclusion! Some excellent imperatives used to convince me and nice use of personal pronouns also. Overall an excellent effort, Georgia. **

Miss Crone :)

__**Monday 20th June**__

__**WALT - identify personifications and use them in our writing**__

S.C. - we can identify the human trait being described

we can identify the object being given a human trait

we can write our own examples of personification

we can explain why this helps to create a picture in our mind


 * Personification Worksheet**


 * Personification:** a figurative language technique where an object or idea is given human traits or characteristics.

What is being personified? _______________________________________________________________


 * Directions:** In each sentence, an object or idea is personified. Identify the object or idea that is

being personified and explain which human trait or action is applied to the object or idea.

1. The wind whispered through the dark and gloomy forest.

2. The gardener lovingly added the manure to his crops believing he was making happy flowers.

3. As we walked through the scorching desert, the sun beat down on us.

4. Time crawled as Tim sat in the hot detention room painfully watching the clock tic.

5. The lumberjack leveled the many trees into a clearing and his chainsaw sang its deadly song.

1. The wind whispered through the dark and gloomy forest.

Which human trait or quality is given? whispered

What is being personified? Wind

2. The gardener lovingly added the manure to his crops believing he was making happy flowers.

Which human trait or quality is given? happy

What is being personified? gardner

3. As we walked through the scorching desert, the sun beat down on us.

Which human trait or quality is given? schorching

What is being personified? desert

4. Time crawled as Tim sat in the hot detention room painfully watching the clock tic.

Which human trait or quality is given?crawled

What is being personified? Time

5. The lumberjack leveled the many trees into a clearing and his chainsaw sang its deadly song.

Which human trait or quality is given? deadly song

What is being personified?chainsaw

6. When Monica walked through the shoe store, each shiny pair of high heels called out to her.

What is being personified? high heels

Which human trait or quality is given?called out to her


 * 1) When the patriots defeated the redcoat army, freedom rang across the fruited plains.

What is being personified?freedom

Which human trait or quality is given? rang across the fruited plains


 * 1) As Alice searched for her missing pencil, she said sarcastically, “Well, I guess it just walked off

of my desk.” She looked at her classmates accusingly.

What is being personified? _______________________________________________________________ Which human trait or quality is given?______________________________________________________


 * 1) Kelly was so happy that Tom and she were moving in together, but when she walked into her new residence, she dropped her suitcase. She had never seen the inside of the house which Tom’s grandmother had given them, and though she was grateful to receive such a nice gift, the ugly yellow wallpaper in the kitchen screamed at her. She knew she would have a lot of work to do to make her new house livable.

What is being personified? _______________________________________________________________ Which human trait or quality is given?______________________________________________________


 * 1) William knew that he shouldn’t have eaten the last cookie out of the cookie jar. He knew that his father loved to eat chocolate chip cookies after work, but William ate the last one anyway. Now as he waited for his father to come home, guilt poked and chewed at William. As delicious as the cookie was, William now wished that he had never opened that cookie jar.

What is being personified? _______________________________________________________________ Which human trait or quality is given?______________________________________________________


 * Personification Worksheet 2**


 * Personification:** a figurative language technique where an object or idea is given human traits or characteristics.


 * Name: _______________________________** **Directions:** In each sentence, an object or idea is personified. Identify the object or idea that is

being personified and explain which human trait or action is applied to the object or idea.


 * 1) The sad waters of the icy wasteland streamed through barren landscape.

What is being personified? _______________________________________________________________ Which human trait or quality is given?______________________________________________________


 * 1) As Shelia walked home from school, the wind gripped her in its frigid fingertips.

What is being personified? _______________________________________________________________ Which human trait or quality is given?______________________________________________________


 * 1) Alan found that his wife had left him, and he felt that joy would never visit his home again.

What is being personified? _______________________________________________________________ Which human trait or quality is given?______________________________________________________


 * 1) The engine hacked and coughed as Kevin turned the key, but the old car wouldn’t start.

What is being personified? _______________________________________________________________ Which human trait or quality is given?______________________________________________________


 * 1) Though Dante tried to live a pious life and be a good father, the streets called to him at night.

What is being personified? _______________________________________________________________ Which human trait or quality is given?______________________________________________________


 * Personification:** a figurative language technique where an object or idea is given human traits or characteristics.

What is being personified? _______________________________________________________________ Which human trait or quality is given?______________________________________________________

What is being personified? _______________________________________________________________ Which human trait or quality is given?______________________________________________________

What is being personified? _______________________________________________________________ Which human trait or quality is given?______________________________________________________

What is being personified? _______________________________________________________________ Which human trait or quality is given?______________________________________________________

What is being personified? _______________________________________________________________ Which human trait or quality is given?______________________________________________________6. The night was calm and still as crickets chirped and owls hooted under the light of the moon.

What is being personified? _______________________________________________________________ Which human trait or quality is given?______________________________________________________


 * 1) Though it’s been said that “Diamonds are a girl’s best friend,” some girls prefer chocolate.


 * 1) Little Vito was attempting to sneak out of his parent’s house to cause trouble late at night. He was tiptoeing across the kitchen floor toward the backdoor the creaky floor boards and his squeaky shoes told his parents he was leaving. Big Vito was none too pleased with little Vito.


 * 1) Gina was the most beautiful girl in the whole town. Her eyes were a blanket of stars. Her teeth shined like fresh porcelain tiles. Her long vivacious hair enjoyed many beautiful adventures as it traveled down the course of her shoulder blades. But the true source of her beauty was her personality: Gina made the world a better place by being a good person.


 * 1) Victor was walking home from his friend Paco’s house late at night when he heard a tree branch breaking deep in the forest. His heart beat rapidly as he wondered what could have made that noise. Was it an animal? Was it a man? Was it something else? Victor knew that the forest would keep its many secrets as he would not be investigating tonight. Victor ran all the way home.

What is being personified? _______________________________________________________________ Which human trait or quality is given?______________________________________________________

What is being personified? _______________________________________________________________ Which human trait or quality is given?______________________________________________________

What is being personified? _______________________________________________________________ Which human trait or quality is given?______________________________________________________

What is being personified? _______________________________________________________________ Which human trait or quality is given?______________________________________________________